Oh I love that Jay describes Cassidy as "terrifying" and then immediately says she was the most beautiful woman she'd ever seen. I also love that Jay is not actually as slick as she seems. The little detail of her bar stool screeching and feeling sheepish about it humanize her.
The tension between Jay and Cassidy is immediate and compelling! You've definitely captured my attention.
Amelia, I’m so glad you’re liking it!! And noticing all of my little details. 😄 I’m coming to really love these two, I hope I can set up a really compelling romance as it goes on.
Another great chapter! The characterization is delightful. We learn so much about the characters and world through the most natural interactions, dialogue and movements. So fun
Oh I love that Jay describes Cassidy as "terrifying" and then immediately says she was the most beautiful woman she'd ever seen. I also love that Jay is not actually as slick as she seems. The little detail of her bar stool screeching and feeling sheepish about it humanize her.
The tension between Jay and Cassidy is immediate and compelling! You've definitely captured my attention.
Amelia, I’m so glad you’re liking it!! And noticing all of my little details. 😄 I’m coming to really love these two, I hope I can set up a really compelling romance as it goes on.
Another great chapter! The characterization is delightful. We learn so much about the characters and world through the most natural interactions, dialogue and movements. So fun
Thank you! I don't usually write in first person so this is new and fun for me too. I do feel like I get to know the characters a lot better.
The internality of Jay really comes through - you're able to characterize well and efficiently without a whole lot of text
Thanks Ernesto! I’m having a lot of fun writing it.
Loved Chapter 2! This is shaping up to be a fun read.